Extremely powerful and strong script and film. Very impressive indeed to have such narrative from one room: looks far bigger budget than I imagine you had. Excellent use of the internet. Really good structure to the piece, so much to it with a very powerful entry. Congrats to all involved, wonderful work.
Very good film. Great delivery of the concept of "reality sinking in". Excellent acting job, main characters, and the faces on the screen. The edit could be tightened up. Little less time on main character close ups. Little longer on the tex on the screen - it wasn't enough time for me to read (my rule for duration of captions/text is to read it out loud - that's how long we need it on the screen)
WHAT I LIKED - I love this story - Impact50 needs more diverse stories like that are about something other than parents and kids/dogs/cats - Well edited - Main actor is great and puts in a really great performance - love the moment at 3:21 - I love the sound design with sound coming in and out with the headphones being on and off THINGS TO CONSIDER - I’m assuming you overlay visuals on the grey screens - I’m also assuming you will do a final color grade - the colors seem kind of flat/log-like at the moment - 1:10 we maybe spend a little to long with the girlfriend here… this film is mainly set up as his story, building to the moment at 3:21, so it felt a little odd to me to spend so much time with her here IF YOU NEED TO MAKE IT SHORTER… - I think you could lose the whole thread with the parents and child to streamline the middle section - 1:10 sequence with girlfriend could be trimmed, per my comment above
No, I didn't like this overall. What was it supposed to be about? The cinematography is great. One thing to watch and this goes for every lighting guy in the Worl is that dark scenes don't work with today's flat screen TV's if you are watching the screen at anything less than head on. Good editing and pace though.
So great. Really captures the chaos and isolation of the internet and there's a lovely dynamic between the three main chatters. Although this does highlight a small problem in that I was more interested in those relationships than that with our real girl. Is she a friend, girlfriend, sister...? In some ways, might it even be better if he's totally alone at the end? Or is there a way to establish more of the real life connection he has to her? Technically, the voice audio needs work - voices sound like they're in the room, rather than coming through a speaker/headphones . Initially I thought the dialogue about god was internal dialogue for our real girl, for example. Shot on her in distress feels too long and the way it looks at the moment the shaking hands seem a bit too much on both of them, despite the nice symmetry. Same at the end, I feel the shot stays on her too long. I love the cut to the real noises of chaos outside but then I feel it ends up being too muc h. Absolutely everything seems to be going on right outside their window, so I think scaling it back would be more effective and realistic. Really great job though, I reckon this will be a brilliant.
Really enjoyed this! It took me a while to figure out that the lead guy didn't know that the world was ending and that he was engrossed in a game, I think this may only be because the game images are currently absent. If there's a way to highlight on those screens that it's a game he's playing then I think you should add that visual in - just something small. I think the family could be cut as the visuals of the three of them sat together didn't suggest that they were playing a game. They looked more like they were on skype or watching TV which only added to my confusion of what the guy was doing. I really liked the ending, especially the part where he takes his headphones off. Well done! x
Bravo, nicely realised with great performances and is on point about current world we live in. Nice bit of social comment. Pacey too. Don't think there's anything I'd change but btw are the white screens still to be fixed in post-prod?
Thanks for all the comments - very encouraging indeed. A few notes - - This is very much a first cut. Things will be tightened up considerably. - The computer screens have yet to be designed and inserted into the monitors - All the screen images in the middle of the film (everything apart from the two main characters in the room) are viewed by our main character in his monitor. - Yes the grade is currently very flat/grey/log. The actual look will be much more punchy. Cheers!
This had me riveted to the screen. So apt of our times right now. I found it moving when he realised at the end. Brilliant performance from you actor. He really looks engrossed and obsessed with the screens and social media. Very convincing. I would just reiterate the same comments about grade and screens. Look forward to seeing the new edit. I would love to see this in the final film.
Loved it! Very tense. Other films I have watched have all tended to aim for the heart-strings, so the slightly different aim of this one was refreshing. I'd have liked the poster saying 'Don't call it an asteroid...' to have stayed on a quarter-second longer because I didn't read the bottom part and I felt I was missing out. And the ending - was the fade to white intended simply to mark the end of the film or to be a special effect of the impact? If the former, maybe do something to make this clearer (keep in some of the funny pixel graphic artefacts?), if the latter make the fade faster, more like a sudden flash.
Oh wow that lad can act. OK. A few comments. The blank screen at the start ran a bit too long for me. I checked the stream thinking something had gone wrong. I don't think you need it that long to have the effect you are after. Love the multiple conversations but did struggle to follow who was speaking. I know many can cope with it but it was a bit sensory overload for me so I kept losing the thread. Is there way to accentuate somehow which at the bottom we are to pay attention to? Conspiracy theory idea is a goody and love his reaction when he realises and that he has wasted that time with his girlfriend though I would expect her to be a bit more forceful. Pull his headphones off a couple of times and be brushed off. Looking forward to the next edit.
This film really got under my skin... in a good way. I really don't want to comment on it until you've uploaded a new version that has the computer screens filled in and all that. I hope that's okay to do.
This is a great first cut (or thereabouts) and it highlights the strength of the piece, namely the protagonist's performance. I really loved his immersion in the game and the inserted visuals on the screen will only add to this. When he realises that the threats are real and not just a game, there is a great moment of realisation. Loved it and it speaks to the zeitgeist of our times, where online life is more dominant than In Real Life. Well done to the writer and to the whole team!
This is magnificent, so of our time right now. People engrossed on social media instead of looking out at the real world. The only thing that confused me was the blank screens, but you explained that in comments above. Can't wait to see the next edit.
I echo what rachel_howard said about the blank screens and also working out the various voices and conversations. The shots on the girlfriend could be tightened. The gamer's reaction as reality struck home were excellent. Good job.
Edit updated - screens now present and (mostly) correct. Film is now colour graded, with a load of other tweaks. I hope you all think it's an improvement!
great job! This feels like it could be a conclusion piece to the whole film. Loved the visuals with the internet story layering and Max is an excellent actor. My only comment would be that the focus on the woman's hands at 1:20 isn't necessary, as it feels too long and takes you out of the pacing of the film, (could she do something else?) I would also say the same of the hand shot towards the end, around the 3:30 mark ... it doesn't feel necessary and pulls you away from the tension of the final moment of realisation. I'd love to see this in the final cut.
This is great - well written, contemporary, very zeitgeist and directed with style and executed with skill. Yes the blank screen at the start is a bit too long as already mentioned and the hands shot is distracting - we get it, she's nervous - and takes away from the main tension too much to be worth keeping. Apart from these tiny things it's great. I really love how the film itself goes from very tech (with all the visual effects) to simply human (with the two characters holding an emotional embrace) reflecting the way the main geeky character changes (he starts off glued to his multiple virtual friends but ends up focused on one real person). The most important thing about this piece, unlike some of the more cerebral pieces, is I really felt it! <3
Oh and brilliant sound design!