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Norah's Ark by Rita Wheeler - impact50film

Tue, 22 May 2018 15:15:42 GMT

micheleflorea
Tue, 22 May 2018 15:15:42 GMT

Love the song, and the kids. The end shots are chilling and extremely well done. I suggest cutting out the beginning scenes of cars, people and sirens, as well as the two women and the shot of the janitor waving and starting around 00:48, right before the little girl saying she misses her mom. Best of luck with this film.

Jane Hamer
Tue, 22 May 2018 22:40:24 GMT

There Some really lovely, tender moments in this film. I too love the song and the singing. The music is really fitting too. I think you've done a really good job and with some tweaks in the edit it could be very good. There's a few sound issues, and I agree with Michele, it really doesn't nee the opening shot. It's too at odds, plus the people just appear to be randomly walking and stopping with no real purpose and it distracts. It would be so good to start it with your wind in the tree shot which is so atmospheric. Also not sure it needs the two women staring at the janitor and the phone call and wave just appears wrong. Otherwise, it's really lovely. Well done.

Carole_CSSUD
Thu, 24 May 2018 16:19:27 GMT

Whoa, I did not see that ending coming, very cleverly done. I agree with the previous comments, it feels a bit too drawn out and loses impact as a result. A punchier cut-down version would work better for me.

KT Parker
Sat, 26 May 2018 13:51:53 GMT

I love the way this begins with all of those superimposed shots. It lost a little bit of energy after that though - I didn't get the point of the two mums pulling a face at the caretaker and think you could lose that to tighten up the beginning. The relationship between the teacher and the children and the silent care of the caretaker is very touching. One thing that jarred was when the teacher said "You know the story of Noah and the ark?" Of course they do! They've just been singing about it! For that line to make sense, I wouldn't have the sound of the children singing until after she says that. Also, the music - as much as I loved its delicate, moody tones - didn't feel right for the whole film; particularly not right at the beginning after those superimposed shots creating a sense of urgency and not underneath the children's singing. I think you need to fade it in and out at appropriate moments.

rachael_howard
Tue, 05 Jun 2018 16:05:10 GMT

Nice one. Why did the two women frown at the caretaker though. At first I thought he was someone iffy because of it. Was this planned already between the teacher and the caretaker in case some parents didn't make it? It would explain the masks being cut ready and the sign too. Could that be explained by her just saying "ready?" on the phone because the children are listening to her? Nice how the two sacrificed their possible family time to help the children.

ritaw
Sun, 01 Jul 2018 11:38:54 GMT

Thank you for your comments and suggestions. We have listened and although have decided to keep the two women, we felt they were important to highlight Mr Huber who has decided to keep on working as if nothing is happening, we have tightened up on the edit at the beginning of the film which we felt would benefit it.

ltrifari1
Sat, 17 Nov 2018 13:23:50 GMT

I agree with most of the comments above re: the two women. I didn't get any sense of urgency as to where they were going, what they were doing, or why they frowned at the janitor. To make the shot more relevant, maybe cut to one or two of the schoolchildren, looking expectantly as the women passed by, and then seeing the disappointment on their faces when they realize it's not their mums and dads?