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The Travellers by Silverbird Productions Ltd - impact50film

Fri, 01 Jun 2018 10:16:53 GMT

Chris at Create50
Fri, 01 Jun 2018 10:16:53 GMT

Loving this!

hyperobject
Fri, 01 Jun 2018 11:50:50 GMT

Expanded on the original script but added a lot to you. What a brilliant effort!

alison_clapham
Fri, 01 Jun 2018 18:45:02 GMT

I felt the changes to the original script worked really well, and added depth to the characters. Convincing acting, combined with interesting locations and costumes. I did feel that the colours were slightly washed out in places, so you may wish to consider having a look at the grading for your next cut. But great job!

andrewdixon
Fri, 01 Jun 2018 22:45:05 GMT

love that last shot - in coming - out going. Also the reflection of the landing craft in the glasses. Don't know how this sci fi will sit with the overall film though?

micheleflorea
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 00:42:51 GMT

I totally enjoyed hearing the dialogue in French. The scenery is beautiful as is the young lady. Not sure the French would have been as polite as the groom was during his 'kidnapping' - I can say that, I'm French ;) but that's a minor detail. I too noticed some bizarre color changes, but, being no film maker, I wondered if it was done on purpose. I would end the film either with the groom spotting the blue handkerchief in the grass, or when the groom gets the car keys and goes back for his bride. It is strange and not quite believable that he'd expect the saviors - whoever they are - to wait for him to return, and the shot of him almost fainting in his bride's arms doesn't work for me. But that's only my opinion, feel free to ignore it. I'm looking forward to the second edit.

martinleewhite
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 01:34:49 GMT

DISCLAIMER - I produced the other version of this script that is submitted for contention! WHAT I LIKED - All of the technicals were great. Great shot selection, editing, grading etc. I particularly liked the steadicam shots - Great production design - I love that this is filmed in French. It is natural to me that we should see films in other native languages in the Impact50 - I love that you’ve really expanded on Matt’s story and adapted to give some of the backstory - Acting was very good and believable THINGS TO CONSIDER - It’s definitely feel a bit on the long side for Impact50, but OK as a standalone film - At the beginning when he says “They’re all gonna call me a freak” it makes it seem like they are before the wedding ceremony (while I think they are actually after?) - I do find it a bit confusing that no-one at the wedding knows about the asteroid? Phones are shown to still be working at multiple points, so it’s not clear why no-one knows (except Stephane)? - 03:18 - colors here look different - 03:34 to 03:36 - colors here look a bit over-saturated - Shot at 04:03 almost looks like log/ungraded footage? - Shot at 4:32 holds a long time - I’m not sure what we are supposed to be seeing in his eyes. At first I thought it was the asteroid… that’s what you expect with the set up of Impact50, but I guess it’s supposed to be the alien ship? IF YOU NEED TO MAKE IT SHORTER… - In each section, you can probably trim for the Impact50 version, while keeping this version as a standalone short - in the dressing room, in the car, through the woods, in the field - 2:50 to 3:10 could be cut

kooi
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 08:42:47 GMT

I agree with the above comments. Great casts and beautiful settings. I feel the jealousy of the younger brother. Can all these beautiful emotions and story be still portrayed if cut down from 6 to 2 minutes? Perhaps the two brothers' journey through the forest can be shortened a bit. Really enjoyed watching it.

Chris at Create50
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 09:20:29 GMT

There is no two minute rule. Never has been one.

kooi
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 11:14:03 GMT

Thanks, Chris. Now I know. But, there must be a limit, right?

Chris at Create50
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 12:14:36 GMT

@kooi the right length is the limit. Most are too long still but there is a right length.

kooi
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 14:24:34 GMT

When we were making, "Daddy's fort", we kept telling ourselves that we couldn't go beyond 2-3 minutes. I noticed that most films submitted here are about that, too.

scriptdog
Sat, 02 Jun 2018 15:41:50 GMT

Love this film but it does take a while to get going. Not sure we need the first 30 or so seconds.

paulwfranklin
Mon, 04 Jun 2018 16:20:02 GMT

Bonjour, Good stuff. Nice to see a French film, because frankly it'd be wrong for the end of the world to happen without one. Reminded me of Les Revenants / The Returned. I wasn't a big fan of the original script so I like how you've developed it... - Although, I think it's too long. - Lovely production quality to start with, the room looks good ... but then his blue shirt! I don't know if that was a deliberate grading choice, but it is so so blue it made me snort. - I'm not sure how much grading you've done, but it's a bit hit-and-miss. The forest is too green, some whites are very blown out... worth having another look at that. - At 4:30, is it meant to be the meteor or a UFO in his eyes? And he looks really angry, whereas I thought he'd be amazed perhaps.... ? Good stuff P.

Jane Hamer
Mon, 04 Jun 2018 22:02:29 GMT

What a refreshing change to see a subtitled film. My goodness the impact needs it to be authentic. I love the length, I wouldn't cut a single second. Love the expanded story. Actors performances were incredible. So convincing. So intense and dramatic. I could have carried on watching this easily and didn't think it was too long. Really enjoyed and admired this.

rachael_howard
Tue, 05 Jun 2018 14:05:29 GMT

Wow. Tres bien! I love the anguish the groom goes through and the horror at what his brother did. I don't think you need the shot of the meteor, just their response. Love that effect in his eyes by the way and that you don't spell out the details of what he sees.

fiona-h
Sat, 09 Jun 2018 15:39:46 GMT

It's so good to see a film in another language on here. I think the fact that this script is played in a dramatic way works really well and the wedding set-up helps to expand the story, although I'm also surprised that no-one at the wedding seems to know about the meteor. It also seems that the blue handkerchief has moved place by the time the groom returns with his wife. My favourite scenes are of the married couple in the forest and at the end. My main suggestion would be to consider cutting the car scenes a little.

jaye50
Fri, 15 Jun 2018 15:47:50 GMT

Could the story begin with the two brothers in the car, and miss out all the stuff at the beginning? Just my thought.

tcwoz
Wed, 20 Feb 2019 16:01:35 GMT

I loved this, but did notice a little fact - not certain if it matters... 16 Miles (per the president's speech =25.75 Kilometers, not the 100km stated on the radio in this film - but I suppose there's no real reason there can't be false or exaggerated news reports when the planet is in a panic, huh?

silverbird
Mon, 06 May 2019 14:57:01 GMT

Hi folks, thank you for your comments! Concerning the asteroid's dimensions, on the Impact50 rules it was first mentioned 'the size of Hawaii' which is roughly like Corsica's, so around 100km. But then the president said something a little more 'plausible', like 26km. That's why we end up having 2 different sizes :)