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White Liar by Core Films - impact50film

Mon, 04 Jun 2018 11:15:47 GMT

micheleflorea
Mon, 04 Jun 2018 15:35:42 GMT

A boy's love for his mom! After so many films/scripts showcasing parents taking care of their kids, I enjoyed this one where the roles are reversed. All three actors did a great job, but the way the line "he is a constant liar" was delivered felt awkward to me. I couldn't tie it to anything that justified it at the time it was uttered. But overall, great job. Best wishes to you all!

Jane Hamer
Mon, 04 Jun 2018 21:43:13 GMT

What stunning quality. Lovely set, atmosphere and lighting. You have a very moving film with beautiful performances. But I think the film can be greatly improved in edit and strengthened by losing several moments that are far too on the nose. You don't need the leaflet to tell us the dad is on an oil rig, we get it just from the dialogue and his hard hat. And the daughter looking at the wifi not working is enough to let us know the what the son is up to. Your audience twigs easily. We don't need it spelling out. If you could lower the dialogue to a whisper with the son and daughter on the stairs discussing what he's done to comfort his mother, as it's not convincing the mother can't hear them they are so close, and lose a bit of on the nose spelling it out again then what you have is a stunning quality film that's incredibly moving. A huge well done, it's a very strong entry. One final thing, does it really need the liar line?

rachael_howard
Tue, 05 Jun 2018 12:58:50 GMT

Made me a bit tearful. Lovely. I think the only technical comment is that maybe a shift in volume towards the end? I was sure the Mum would hear with those sound levels. Only a little thing. Brill.

bang2write18
Wed, 06 Jun 2018 10:03:49 GMT

Lovely idea, looks great, plus really nice to see a BME cast. Hackers/computer nerds are so often pale, white guys (who often not empathetic at all) so it's great to see this familiar trope challenged. The brother and the mum characters are drawn really well, but the sister sticks out for me. Part of this is the performance - 'Miiiiiike!' sounds like she's calling him for school; the other part is her endless anger in the writing, especially the repetition of the word 'liar'. The first 'liar' seems to come out of nowhere as Rachel says, plus her lack of understanding via anger over the fake screen seems very extreme given she is an adult ... Had she been a tween or teenager, this might have come over as more convincing. Overall however, I thought this was an excellent short and I am not surprised it is so popular on the site. Edit-wise, perhaps some minor tweaks to the sister's dialogue could help?

ritaw
Thu, 07 Jun 2018 13:37:26 GMT

I enjoyed this short film. I must admit I thought Hannah was Mike's mum the way she called to him in the opening scene but it was soon obvious this was sibling rivalry. Nicely filmed and acted.

alison_clapham
Fri, 08 Jun 2018 18:38:23 GMT

A very poignant piece. Beautifully filmed, with great visuals and lighting. Initially I didn't watch this full screen, and I couldn't actually see what the oil rig leaflet was - yet I understood what was going on, so I agree with @mcsqueak that it isn't necessary, as the hard hat image makes it clear. I also felt that the dialogue on the stairs was a little loud, so their mother would have heard it. Great job!

Kim L. Wheeler
Wed, 13 Jun 2018 10:07:40 GMT

Wow. Pete, yourself, Tom and the cast and crew have made a super job of this, Ben. Congratulations to all on a very moving film. :) x

sallyeastland
Fri, 21 Dec 2018 18:13:11 GMT

A wow from me too. A brilliantly executed short film. Very poignant. Beautifully crafted in all respects. xx

stephanie-ginger
Thu, 21 Feb 2019 13:00:03 GMT

I love this - it's moving, true and honest and beautifully made. I agree with pretty much everything. I did (briefly) think that the sister was the son's mother but altogether a fine piece of work!

stephanie-ginger
Thu, 21 Feb 2019 13:00:03 GMT

Great work! Very moving and beautifully done altogether. The only criticism is that I too thought (briefly) that the sister was the young man's mother, but only briefly.

alanx
Mon, 15 Apr 2019 14:04:38 GMT

This is a top entry for me and great that it doesn't end in the impact itself like so many others do. I note the comments above to lose the "liar" line but I think it's good to establish he is a constant liar but on this occasion he uses his bad habit to good use. Leave it in. There were two shots of the oil rig brochure - maybe one fleeting one would be enough where it pans to the phone. It's a lovely piece of emotional story telling. Excellent work and well made.

Michael van Koetsveld
Fri, 26 Apr 2019 22:42:59 GMT

Great work. I did find the volume levels a little distracting near the end when the children went up the stairs, but that's all.