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JingsNdthings
Tue, 13 Feb 2018 21:02:18 GMT

I want to like this because your delivery's fantastic. All the words you use though just feels like reaching to sound like a certain vibe. Reaching hard. Like "Guys machines made of light. That's psychedelic right?" or "purple ocean. Get it? Because usually oceans are blue and shit. That's cool right?" Then that whole scheme where you just rhyme the last suffix: tion. Feels real lazy and a reach to try to sound smart. Don't rhyme self with help.

Pagliacci
Tue, 13 Feb 2018 23:38:01 GMT

Thanks for the feedback. Much more helpful than simply a few words like “nice or lit”. I don’t see myself as reaching, just trying to convey my experiences as honestly as I can. I can see what you mean with the rhymes though. I want to like your feedback because of there’s valid criticisms, but it reeks of arrogance and self satisfaction so that kinda ruins it for me.

JingsNdthings
Wed, 14 Feb 2018 01:05:43 GMT

I could've phrased things better. I'm arrogant, and it did feel good to tell you those things. In no way do I think I'm better than you though. I'm sure you could go through my stuffs and find plenty of flaws. Like my delivery. Which is why I complimented yours because I'm lacking in it. I'll do better to leave the attitude at the door next time and just give criticism.