Thu, 05 Apr 2018 04:20:00 GMT
I like the chorus. I think this song needs a little work but you're definitely on the right track and the flow is there. Just some of the rhymes feel a bit forced. Otherwise Great job and keep writing!
Sat, 07 Apr 2018 14:27:33 GMT
Thank you for the feedback, I think I will go back and work on it to see if I can improve it in the ways you suggested.