Gonna watch now!
OK, finally got some time to comment on this, so here we go! First of all, congrats on actually completing the film. Knowing the effort it takes to make a movie, I believe that completing a project alone is a big accomplishment. So good job, and hope to see more work from you in the future. This kinda reminded me of Fight Club. I remember a while back you said that was one of your favorite movies, so that would explain the thematic similarities. Overall I do like the "wake up, you're not really free" message of this, but I don't personally agree that a kid going to school is that bad. If it was a college student I would've agreed more with the message, but considering the main character looks like he's 12, I can't help but think "Stop being so lazy and just go to school, kid!" as I watch this. As you said though, this was mostly to practice and learn, so here are some constructive criticism. I think the beginning of the film should be more eventful. Keep in mind that this is a 5 minute short film, so you should use your minutes better. During the first minute of the movie, nothing really happens. That's 1/5th of your movie, and nothing really captures my attention. When it comes to short films, I say get to the point as quickly as possible. I don't like the fast-forwarding of him walking that happens at 0:40 seconds. Sometimes speeding up a clip can work if it fits the style of the film, but here it looked a bit amateurish. For this instance, cutting to another clip would be less awkward. A lot of the shots have the DSLR "jitter-shake" that comes when you do handheld shots with small cameras. In the future, try to get a shoulder mount, or find some way to reduce that. More to come...
I like the line, "White liquid, some pencil shavings, and that's it." Milk and cereal has never sounded so bad! That's a great thing because you're deliberately using words to degrade one of the best (in my opinion) breakfasts out there. For a split second I really did agree that drinking that white liquid is terrible, and that I must free myself to get some better breakfast!
So, any feedback?
Thank you very much for your feedback! Yes i do agree that the kind is not the prefect fit for this character, however i had to work with what i have… as its just for practice..its just easier to use my little brother in my stuff.. Yes i know that nothing much happens in the beginning.. but i was going for like a calm subtle beginning…and like a depressing neighbourhood type thing, also i liked those shots at the beginning and did not want to cut them… actually I did alot of cutting after the first edit, thinking do I really need this to tell the story, but its hard to loose shots you really like.. ( Yea I thought so too, that the fast-forwarding did not work, but I just got too lazy to go and get another shot so i kept it in there… I could have cut it shorter.. but i wanted to keep the whole thing… Oh I am still learning.. I have so much to learn… my craftsmanship is very amateurish I believe.. Thank u for the milk and cereal comment.. I never did like cereal much.. And sorry it took me so long to reply.. I have been abit away… :)
The most important thing is that you keep on going and creating new films. I look forward to your next project!
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